Corrections are going to be red.
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Toronto is the largest city in Canada and is the capital of the province of Ontario. There are 2.5 millions residents live living in Toronto. Toronto’s population is cosmopolitan and international. 49 % Forty-nine percent of Canadian residents were born outside of Canada. In 2006, Toronto was rated as the most expensive city to live in.
You never start a sentence with a number, it must be a numeral.
This Toronto is one of the top financial cities in the world. Toronto’s leading economic sectors are: finance, business services, telecommunications, aerospace, transportation, media, arts, film, television production, publishing, software production, medical research, education, tourism and the sports industry.
When you have a long list like that, you should rewrite the sentence like this: Toronto’s leading economic sectors are vast and include: finance, business services, publishing, and medical research to name a few.
Also if you are going to make a list like that, you should include a colon (:), which I put in red in your sentence.
The name Toronto is derived from the Iroquois word “Tkoronto,” meaning which means, “place where trees stand in the water.“ In 1793, Governor John Graves Simcoe established the town of York. York was incorporated as into the city of Toronto on March 6, 1834. In the 19th century, an extensive sewage system was built, and streets became illuminated with gas lighting as a regular service. Long distance railways were also constructed. The advent of the railways brought new immigrants, particularly Germans, Italians and Jews, from various parts of Eastern Europe to Toronto. Soon the Chinese people came, just like along with the Russians and Polish.
Toronto covers the area of 630 square kilometers of land. Its borders are the Lake Ontario in the South, Etobicoke Greek and Highway 427 in the West, Steels Avenue in the North and finally Rouge River in the East. Toronto’s climate is moderate, and its time zone is Eastern Standard Time. David Miller is the mayor of Toronto.
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I rearranged some of the information, putting the related information together. For example, after you were talking about Toronto’s economic sectors, you randomly mentioned the population, which would’ve made more sense at the beginning of the paragraph. Your original paper is as follows:
Toronto is the largest city in Canada and capital of province Ontario. 2.5 millions residents live in Toronto. This is one of the top financial cities in the world. Toronto’s leading economic sectors are finance, business services, telecommunications, aerospace, transportation, media, arts, film, television production, publishing, software production, medical research, education, tourism and sports industries. Toronto’s population is cosmopolitan and international. 49 % Canadian residents were born outside of Canada. In 2006 Toronto was rated as the most expensive city to live in.
The name Toronto is derived from the Iroquois word tkoronto, meaning place where trees stand in the water. In 1793, Governor John Graves Simcoe established the town of York. York was incorporated as the city of Toronto on March 6, 1834. In the 19th century, an extensive sewage system was built, and streets became illuminated with gas lighting as a regular service. Long distance railways were constructed. The advent of railway brought new immigrants, particularly Germans, Italians and Jews. from various parts of Eastern Europe. Soon Chinese people come just like Russians and Polish.
Geography
Toronto covers the area of 630 square kilometers. Borders are Lake Ontario to the south Etobicoke Greek and Highway 427 to the west, Steels Avenue to the north and Rouge river to the east. Toronto’s climate is moderate, time zone is eastern. David Miler is Mayor of Toronto.